hi
very sensitive incident that might happen to our writer too.
waiting to hear from you
keep writing
keep writing more
one fine moment you will grow in to a successful financially too as a romance writer
Mills and boons competitor has arrived here and now
cheers
easwaran
bangalore
damn man……..! awesome piece of writing and also i agree to what anurag said…..
and
dont waste your time in stupid romantic shit
A good attempt. I am sorry if you find the criticism harsh but it’d definitely help.
1) I felt the short story was a bit over the top and flowery. You seemed to beg for attention in the beginning of the write up.
2) The word ‘technically’ is out of context in the 5th last paragraph. Use something general.
3) If you are writing for an Indian audience, the suggestion that parents may not allow a girl to get wet in the rains does hold true to some extent, but definitely is a big no-no when it comes to international readers.
4) Excessive usage of the word ‘damn’.
All in all it made a good read. An abstract end would have done wonders to the write up, but if you want a happy ending, well and good. Thanks for sending the link to your write up.
yar sid……….m happy at d origin of a great writer………but i do agree with adway at some points………but in all a good write up with able 2 attract attention……..
nice effort must say !! i liked the starting 2 paraghraphs most but somewhere the intro part was filmy and unrealistic ( i feel ) ….. but still good work, hope to see mork work from you
u leave your trademark everywhre fusing flowery language with slang… in a way its good… very well described id say….i mean each and every moment, id venture to say everyone will agree, was easily visualised which was really cool and a really important attribute…. dude you are a great write but just take care of “technicalities” and overcontrast of the language… cheers man …. from the heart i loved it…. just a few suggestions which might be included in d sequel
awsome….. ur gonna b a gr8 writer.. keep writing.. all d best….
i hope you’ll not delete my comment ![]()
first of all i have this feeling that i’ve read fourth para somewhere else, kind of chetan bhagat shit (no offfence to your writing though).
secondly i know you can write a lot better than this sappy absolute romantic rat shit, so please use your gifted ability for some other genre, leave all this to likes of chetan bhagat and few others whose names i have forgotten after stuffing my limited brain with EPCSM (although i flunked in it!).
thirdly, considering you’ll keep writing its chapters after chapters as i can see from the ‘public’ demand reflected by the above comments, all i can suggest you is financial inflow comes when writing is in tandem with ‘public’ demand, e.g. sidney sheldon. So a simple change in 3rd para as, reminding ‘Let’s Play’ of girl’s tee of sania mirza rather than her nose ring will do wonders (you know what i mean, even though sania mirza has just been kicked out of US open after an awesome performance of 6-0 6-0 ).
Finally, i think eeswara is a bit too optimistic or he has never read any of the mills & boon, for they have lots of sex in them, good or bed but nevertheless lots of it. And this is something i am damn sure (adway keep counting!) that you can write a good sex novel, but don’t copy Tarun Tajpalistic kind of sex!
Keep writing
I sincerely wish that you become the first indian writer to win the ‘prestigious’ Bulwer-Lytton award!!
To Anurag: Your comments made good reading. I do seem to agree with you. lol!
nice effort…well story is also cool…all d best..:)
an interesting read..but then u cud hav kept the romance subtle..it was too on the face…one thing i really liked was the way in which u set d mood 4 the story by giving the rain-earth love-making comparison
too many of advices….no??;)
well…to me it was surely captivating for the first two paras( romance or no romance)!! though it held my interest till the end, i felt as if you were dying to end it as soon as possible ( i might be wrong or this can be a compliment that i wanted more of it
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a writer cant be caged into genres( i believe so)…some are gifted while some are limited and thats what has lead to the so called genre phenomenon…i cant say whats shit and whats not but i can say this much that i liked this one…be it romance or anything…it held me and i loved those poetic effects at the beginning!!
September 2, 2009 at 10:12 pm
somthing which has penitrted to the heart…..the amaizingly beautiful girl….the frnzzy rain wanting to fill love everywhere….n the strawberry sweet feeling of being carried away in charizma of love…JUST SO SO MAST!!!!GR8 DEAR….LOOKING FORWARD TO SEQUEL OF THIS STORY….